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Question:
Compare and contrast the advantages of choosing a stable career over an adventurous lifestyle.
Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion.
Nowadays there are many careers appeared , some of them are stable , while the other is dangerous .I believe that people must choose a stable career to have a good life. This essay will discusses the tow ideas .
Some people choose a stable career , and they have their reason for that . for example , people like to have a happy and comfortable life , so they will choose a careers which it will be as they want . Also people choose a stable career because of their salary and yearly allowance .
Other people choose a dangerous career ,and they have their reason also. First, they choose it because they like an adventures or the like a career from the chilhood . Second , they choose it because they want to deal with life and they dont have another choices to have , so it will be the way deal with life and have a good life .
To sumup , people must first look at the stable career choices , after that if the have not any of these choices they can look at the stable career to stay alive and deal with life .